Term 2 Writing
This term we have been looking at ways to make our writing more interesting for the reader.
This term we have been looking at ways to make our writing more interesting for the reader.
We have used the following criteria to guide us:
- Changing the word order of a sentence
- Using literary devices such as metaphor, simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia and personification
- Using specific verbs and adjectives
- Using show, don’t tell techniques
- Using different sentence beginnings and lengths
Here are some examples of my writing this term.
Emotion show don’t tell
Excited
Jumping up and down,
Shouting yes!! With a smile on my face We are go to Turangi to see my Granddad and go fishing.
Happy
Watching my indicator float down the river. Bloop it went under, strike I’ve hooked it. Yes!! I think to myself.It’s giving me a great fight I say to Dad,Finally I got it on the bank. Yes I got it!!
Sad
Turning the truck on, it sounds like home. Saying our goodbyes
with a frown on my face I don’t want to go.
Music Writing
Slowly I crept up behind the group of people, boo!! I yelled, I swung my machete, One head came off, Blood all over me. Run!! yelled Billy AHHH!!!!
Fearlessly chasing after the rest, hearing someone's feet rustling the leaves on the ground. Jumping on his back “I’ve got you!”
I say, plunging my machete into his heart, blood running out. Hahahaha! I laughed like a maniac. Waiting for my next victims to come.
The Boy
Rolling out the school gates, this was the worst day of my life .
All the bullies were picking on me, it felt like I was trapped in a box.
Wildly I ran home. Loudly I stomped up the stairs to my room. Slamming my door closed.
Rushing to my room, Mum asks “Are you ok?”
“Go away!!” I yell.
Slamming my head into my pillow, a flood of tears start to come out.
The next day I was walking to school quickly, a bully pushed me
over into a puddle. I got soaked, but I just got back up and started walking.
“Are you scared?” the bully said, with an angry voice. I just kept walking. He kept trying to get my attention. “Just go away please” I said.
“What are you going to do about it aye?!! The bully said.
As I was walking through the school gates. A teacher spotted me soaked, so she sent me home.
When Mum picked me up it was a silent ride home. As we stopped in the driveway
I burst out the car, ran through the door, stomped upstairs into my room, slammed the door and threw myself onto my bed and cried myself to sleep.
The viking girl
Ramming my door open smash!! Is all I hear As the anger rushes through my veins “I’ve had enough” I say. Her facial expressions are so fierce. She had Bags under her eyes and a big frown. Running my hands through my hair messing it all up. Bad thoughts going through my mind .”My little girl is turning into to a demon” I said to my wife. Crying into my pillow, Angry as can be! Stomping my feet As my parents call me out no!!! I yell “i’m not coming out.”
By Jacob Seamark
